IELTS GURU об использовании разнообрзных соединительных элементов.
Sample 1
The percentage of obese people rose steadily from 8 percent in 1950 to 15 percent in 1970. There was a slight dip, and then there was a gradual rise until 1990. It rose steeply for the next ten years, and then it leveled off. It has risen even more sharply, and is projected to peak at 35 percent in 2010 and then will level off.
В первом варианте элементы предложений соединены между собой союзом and. Такой вариант хоть и не является неверным, но все же может быть улучшен.
Sample 2
The percentage of obese people rose steadily from 8 percent in 1950 to 15 percent in 1970. There was a slight dip, followed by a gradual rise until 1990. After rising steeply for the next ten years, it leveled off. Since then it has risen even more sharply. It is projected to peak at 35 percent in 2010 and level off thereafter.
Совет дня - соединять предложения между собой лучше при помощи "while, after/before doing smth, followed by".
Sample 1
The percentage of obese people rose steadily from 8 percent in 1950 to 15 percent in 1970. There was a slight dip, and then there was a gradual rise until 1990. It rose steeply for the next ten years, and then it leveled off. It has risen even more sharply, and is projected to peak at 35 percent in 2010 and then will level off.
В первом варианте элементы предложений соединены между собой союзом and. Такой вариант хоть и не является неверным, но все же может быть улучшен.
Sample 2
The percentage of obese people rose steadily from 8 percent in 1950 to 15 percent in 1970. There was a slight dip, followed by a gradual rise until 1990. After rising steeply for the next ten years, it leveled off. Since then it has risen even more sharply. It is projected to peak at 35 percent in 2010 and level off thereafter.
Совет дня - соединять предложения между собой лучше при помощи "while, after/before doing smth, followed by".
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